Do you want to know what happened on August 29th, 1914? Well New Zealand wanted to help Samoa to get the Germans off Samoa because there wanted Samoa to have there freedom. So on the August the 29th 1914 New Zealand just landed on soman land there fighted for Samoa freedom and there won.
Do you know what there sleep in? Well it was a trench Do you want to know if it was safe or not? Well It was safe because you could not see in the dark and if there shoot there might shoot there team mates.The people who went to world war 1 sleeped in a trench. a trench is like a big long log that has been digged and it is higher than there heads and the soldiers will be safe.
New Zealand had won the war and may pepelo died. So if you may Remember this rule! We shall remember them.
I didn’t remember to make it clear And 'juicy'. The next time I need to remember to add different sentence beginnings. The next time I write I want to try and improve the detail that I add to my writing. I have realised that I should have put a lot of planning to make it super good.
My goal for writing is to make it more sense.